Ideas/thoughts please!

[UberAris]

Hey all! Once more I come asking of your oppinion.

In my College writeing class we were asked to write a "Personal oppinion essay", Well guess what I chose?

Yup!

Size Acceptance and the apparent American obsession with weightloss. So as it stands, I pretty much have my entire essay laid out, what I want to write and what not, but I would greatly apperiate any input or thoughts on what I have so far. Any suggestions would be welcome as well.

Here's a basic layout of what I have in my essay:

Intro
-Xantrex 3 comertial quote
-a deeper look at the comertial with Criticism
-Sunday morning TV ad's, and my personal annoiance

Body
-American Obsession w/ weightloss
-Skeletal beauty?
-Ana/buliema, aka Case and Point
-Goverment lies! (dealing with the miscount on the obeseity percentile)
-Gov. and Commertial Scare tactics
-Self Pride, why can't one be happy?
-Preverbialy force fed what you need to look like
-OCD of the Pants Size

Concl.
-Fat... and Sassy!
-Be happy with who you are and your apperiance!
-My personal thoughts on healthy living



Thanks for looking this over! I greatly appreciate it!

 

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